On Query Writing
I’ve written a few query letters in
my day and well, it seems this is one of those things that you can
never have enough information on! I’m not an expert by any means, I
don’t proclaim to be, but I can give you a few hints because I’ve
written queries that have grabbed the attention of agents, publishers
and even readers.
Now, for those of you who are staring
blankly at me, wondering, what the heck a query letter is. Don’t
worry, you’re not alone. I, too, was where you are when I first
started out writing. And, I’ll be the first to admit, I was
extremely naive when it came to how real publishing works!
So, in short, think of a query letter
as a ONE PAGE back cover blurb. This is what you use, your ONE
PAGE cover letter, so to speak, to grab the attention of an
agent, a publisher or even an unsuspecting reader (many back cover
blurbs stem from that of the query letter)
I repeat ONE PAGE and not one
page in a small font size that needs to be zoomed in to be read. I’m
talking, the entire thing, fitting on ONE standard sheet of 8 ½ X 11
paper in a READABLE (this is not the time to go fancy) font
such as Time New Roman, Courier even Arial (some agents or publishers
will tell you what font they want you to use) with a standard font
size of 12pt.
Alright, moving on, in my opinion there
are four major points to a query letter.
First we have
the salutation. “Dear super awesome agent!” Take a few
moments and do some research. You WILL want to direct your query to
an agent by their NAME! If you are subbing to a publisher, you will
want to look up NAMES, try, if at all possible, not to direct your
query “Dear awesome acquisitions editor” Also, if your agent or
editor is male—Use Mr. If you know, without a doubt in your mind,
that the person you’d like to direct your query to is married, go
ahead and use Mrs. If you have no clue, you don’t know if your
agent is a twenty something gal or a slightly more mature older lady
who may or may not be married, for safety, simply use Ms.
Second you
have the body of your query. I honestly don’t like to
waste time. I like to jump right in with both feet. You MAY if you
choose have a line before the body where you CAN say to the super
awesome agent that you met them at a conference, you interacted with
them on twitter or are answering a call for submissions you saw on
their website or blog. If you don’t have anything important to say
in that one line, don’t say anything.
The body of your query should be a
short, fast paced, wordy by not overly wordy description of your
novel. It should be approximately 500 words. It will have an opening
line that should grab the reader by their pants and yank them in to
read your next paragraph. This should be the body of your novel but
only focus on the super duper interesting and important parts! And
the last paragraph should blow them out of the water. This needs to
seal the deal.
When writing your body, there are
usually a few questions that need to be answered. Actually, wait,
they SHOULD be answered to make for a successful query letter.
What does your
character want or what has happened to your character?
What does your
character have to do to accomplish the above task or what has them
motivated?
What happens
if your character fails at accomplishing the task or what happens if
they succeed?
These questions are loose, as in you’ll
have to mold them slightly, depending on your story arc, but they
need to be answered.
Thirdly the
next small paragraph should be a line or two stating the
book’s title, the word count, the genre and if important the sub
genre. There is always a bit of uncertainty with whether or not this
should be at the top of the query or at the bottom. I always put it
at the bottom. I want the query to speak first. Not to mention there
are sometimes guidelines that I tend to bend, say for instance, word
count. Some agents or publishers want to see books with a certain
word count—but you think the agent or publisher is a PERFECT fit
for you and your work, why not try anyways? However, if you put your
word count at the beginning and it’s under or over what the
guideline states, well, you might get rejected and the agent didn’t
even read the rest of the letter. However if you have a rocking
query, they get to the bottom and they see the word count but the
query might be all they’ve been looking for, well, you might find
you have a request on your hands. Also, take this with a grain of
salt and heed this advice, NOT ALL GUIDELINES CAN BE BROKEN—this
would require another post, so simply use caution when bending or
breaking requested guidelines.
Fourthly, a
lot of times agents will ask for a SHORT bio or your writing
credentials. If you have this
in place and it is only a few lines, feel free to add it. If you
don’t have credentials or they don’t ask for a bio, don’t
worry, just leave this blank. But not all credentials are created
equal, being a finalist in a major contest is a good one, previous
publishing experience is good, but saying that your great grandmother
read the novel on her death bed and loved every word is not a good
thing to add. Seriously. Keep your query professional.
And lastly,
your end salutation. This is where you state your name and
include ALL your important information. Your phone number (some
people still call, I know, it’s crazy, but they do) your email (not
everyone likes to talk on the phone) your website or blog (some
agents/publishers will Google you anyways, so, you might as well be
upfront if you have one of these) and your address (believe it or
not, snail mail is still an active form of communication)
Alright, sometimes it’s good to have
things put into perspective. So, I’m opening the vault and pulling
out the query letter that landed me a more than one contract offer
for A Stiff Kiss.
Dear
Ms. Super Awesome Agent;
Seventeen-year-old
Xylia Morana is obsessed with death.
This is the hook line. It gives you that sense of intrigue and
wonder. She hangs out with the
terminally ill, attends random funerals, and every so often, when the
weathers right, she sleeps in open graves for entertainment.
When
Xylia sneaks into the morgue to catch a glimpse of Landon Phoenix,
the recently deceased high school hottie, she does the unthinkable
and steals a kiss from the corpse. The last thing she expects is for
Landon to wake up--but that’s exactly what happens. This
is what happened to the character, giving the novel a reason to
exist.
Xylia
then does everything she can to avoid the soccer star turned medical
miracle--because who wants to admit
they kissed a stiff?--This
is what is happening as a result of the above line in red.
but Landon’s not about to let the girl who brought him back to life
get away without some answers.
But
Xylia’s main problem isn’t just the questions surrounding the
life-reviving kiss she shared with Landon. This
is part of what the character is trying to achieve. Knowledge.
What Xylia doesn’t know is that
Landon’s return has thrown life and death off balance. The
underworld demands a body and it might just have to be Xylia’s this
time. These
are the stakes so to speak and what will happen if the character
fails, death.
A
STIFF KISS is a completed young adult paranormal novel of 58,000
words.
I
would be delighted to send you sample chapters of A STIFF KISS, or
the entire manuscript, at your request. Thank you in advance for your
time and consideration. Since
at the time I didn’t really have a bio or credentials I didn’t
put any, you will put them here, and if you’d like have a line like
these as a closing to your query.
Sincerely,
Avery
Olive
(Full
Mailing Address)
(Full
Phone Number)
Now,
I’m sure even you can say, well, that’s not that good of a query.
Of course, reading it now, many years later, I can see its flaws.
But, it get’s the core premise of the novel out into the open and
trust me, even three years ago, it did its job. A Stiff Kiss is a
published book. Also, don’t worry if it takes you more than one
draft to perfect a query. I think this was draft number ten, at
least. Don’t send it out until you are comfortable with it (and
your manuscript is polished and ready to go) and even then, expect to
make a few tweaks. Send out your query letter in batches, if after a
bit of time has passed and all you’ve gotten are rejections, it
might be because of your query letter. It’s not doing its job, so,
tweak it and try again.
I
also said that query letters are like a back cover blurb and many
back cover blurbs stem from the Authors original query letter. The
blurb for A Stiff Kiss is no different. If you compare the two,
you’ll see what’s been kept and what was taken out. They are
quite similar and grab the attention of readers as it did grabbing
the attention of publishers!
Also,
this is a quick post on query letters. I won’t be surprised if you
are still struggling with writing the perfect query letter. It’s
hard. Even now, I still have troubles with it! There are things you
can do take your knowledge one step further and help you on your
journey.
Have
you heard of Absolute Write? They are an amazing forum with a section
solely on query letters, how to write them and even offer free
critiquing.
The
very talented Query Shark (I shiver when I hear or read that name and
cower because she’d probably rip my query to shreds) offers
monumental amounts of advice for polishing up the dreaded query
letter.
You
can also join and local writing group, find some critique partners
and read EVERY back cover blurb you come across and familiarize
yourself with the layout, what’s been said and how it’s been
said.
And
remember, don’t give too much away. If that’s something I can fix
when it comes to the back cover blurb of A Stiff Kiss, I’d leave
readers hanging just a little bit more!!
A
Stiff Kiss
Avery Olive
Avery Olive
Genre: Young Adult
Paranormal Romance
Publisher: Crescent Moon
Press
ISBN: 978-1-937254-33-9
ASIN: B0075M4KA2
Number of pages: 248
Word Count: Approx. 68,000
Cover Artist: Taria Reed
Book Description:
Who
knew kissing a corpse would change everything?
Death always hits Xylia Morana too close to home, but she likes it that way. She hangs out with the terminally ill, attends random funerals, and every so often, when the weather is right, she sleeps in open graves.
But after Landon Phoenix, the high school hottie, dies in Xylia's arms, she sneaks into the morgue to say goodbye. How could she know stealing a kiss from his corpse would wake him up?
With Landon returned to the living and suddenly interested in Xylia, life has new meaning. But what Xylia doesn't realize is that by kissing Landon back to life, she's thrown Life and Death off balance. The underworld demands a body, and it might just have to be Xylia's this time.
Death always hits Xylia Morana too close to home, but she likes it that way. She hangs out with the terminally ill, attends random funerals, and every so often, when the weather is right, she sleeps in open graves.
But after Landon Phoenix, the high school hottie, dies in Xylia's arms, she sneaks into the morgue to say goodbye. How could she know stealing a kiss from his corpse would wake him up?
With Landon returned to the living and suddenly interested in Xylia, life has new meaning. But what Xylia doesn't realize is that by kissing Landon back to life, she's thrown Life and Death off balance. The underworld demands a body, and it might just have to be Xylia's this time.
Short Excerpt:
No way
should I be in the morgue. If I'm caught, I'll lose my job. My dad
will probably get fired, too. He's been warned to keep me out of
here.
The
walls are lined with thick, square doors, clearly marked with
numbers. I stop in front of the one I want. In the middle of that
wall, at waist height, is number twelve. Beyond the door, lying on a
sliding metal table, is the body of Landon Phoenix.
I've
always had a crush on Landon, ever since freshman year when his
family moved to Silver Springs. I've watched him grow into his looks,
no longer a gangly boy with braces. And I've longed to hear my name
roll off his tongue in that deep voice of his. To press my lips
against his as he holds me in a tight embrace. To share the same air
as him.
Though
now, all those things are impossible. Except one. I can pull open the
door, slide the table out, and at least for a moment I can share the
same air, even though his lungs can no longer pull in that air.
I
hesitate, my hand on the handle. Besides my mother, this will be the
only other person who's died that I've really known. The others have
just been people, random ones at that. The guy from the grocery store
who jumped off Whibley Bridge into the icy waters below, the
occasional patient of mine who'd succumbed to old age, and many, many
others. But this is personal. This is someone I'd known. Or at least,
someone I'd held secretly in my heart.
But I
need to say goodbye.
About
the Author:
Avery
Olive is proudly Canadian. She is married, and when she’s not
helping raise her very energetic and inquisitive son, she can be
found working on her latest novel-where she devilishly adds U's into
every word she can.
When
she is looking for a break Avery enjoys cake decorating, losing
herself in a good book, or heading out to the lake to go camping.
The
release of Avery's first novel proves to her it won't be the last. As
long as her family continues to be supportive, she can find the time,
and people want to read, Avery will keep on writing.


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